College Appeal Letter…your Opinion Please?
I have to write an appeal letter because I was denied readmission. The story is below in my appeal letter, but I need to know if it is too much or what? I’m confused on if I need to add more or take some away. Does it sound like I’m begging??? I haven’t edited any so there may be some gramatical errors.
To Whom It May Concern:
This letter is to appeal the denial of my re-admission to The University of Texas at San Antonio. It has come to my attention that I was denied admission due to my low GPA at The University of Oklahoma Norman Campus. I would like the admissions department to reconsider their decision once they have reviewed the situation that resulted in the low GPA at the previous University.
I was a student at UTSA for four years, and was an average student. My cousin and I are the first of my family to attend college, and UTSA is the college we both chose. I greatly enjoyed UTSA and would love to attain my bachelor’s from such a well known university. I have confidence that the great faculty and staff can guide me to the career I desire as I experienced straight out of high school. In return, I will devote my studies and strive to be a better student than before.
I married a US Navy petty officer which resulted in us moving to Oklahoma City, Oklahoma where he was stationed at Tinker AFB. I was granted admission into The University of Oklahoma Norman Campus for the fall semester of 2007. I was excited, and relieved that I had no issues continuing my education. However, it was disappointing that nearly half of my credits did not transfer. I decided to take only once course. We were in the process of buying our first home together, and adjusting to the state. I found a job working at OU Health Science Center in accounting department, which I extremely enjoyed working in the field I desired to study.
It was not long before my husband and I found out we were expecting. It was very hard for me to cope with everything, as this was the first time I was away from home. Soon after, my husband told me had he decided to stay in the service he would be deployed on a ship for an unknown amount of time. This took a toll not only on the future of my family, but also my marriage and the health of my unborn baby and me. We soon decided that my husband’s presence for the birth of my daughter and her life was much more important. It was at that time that we decided we would separate from the military and start our family and future back in San Antonio, Texas. We thought that would be the answer to all our problems, but we were mistaken. At that time, I missed the deadline to drop my course by a day or two. I was told it would not transfer back to UTSA, and I felt that I did not need to complete the class. I thought the payment of the course and time was all that I lost. Now, that I know that was not all that was lost, I deeply regret taking the easy way out.
We moved back to San Antonio in the summer of 2008, and are completely settled in. I wished to take classes as soon I returned San Antonio. I had to be honest with myself, and decided I needed to wait. I knew I could not take on more than I could handle, as I learned my lesson last time around. It has now come my time to continue my education and plan a better life for my family. I now have a bigger and better reason to accomplish my life time goal, and “failure is not an option” is my motto.
I am grateful for the work experience in Oklahoma, because I realized that is something that I do not want as my career. I have now decided that I will follow my dream as a child to pursue my education as a math teacher.
I have the potential and desire to be that student that the university will be proud of. With the universities assistance I would like to accomplish my life time goal and attain a bachelor’s degree from The University of Texas at San Antonio. With all do respect, I would like the university to reconsider my application once more.